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In any case I don't think I

Oxy Mora — Thu, 15 Dec 2011 23:03:08 +0000

In any case I don't think I would ever change a hair in Chapter 12 as written. It's the model and the inspiration, a gem, a gift. Somehow I would work back from it, as it stands. The same with the vignette in Chapter 1, although for some reason I see it more in the middle of the work than the beginning. I'm not sure I see Lincoln as flat.

I think you are right.

Rootman — Thu, 15 Dec 2011 19:42:24 +0000

In reply to Great concept and well

I think you are right. Another way is to make Lincoln only a minor character (he seems kind of flat anyway) and really develop some fresh and vivid characters in a parallel drama. Maybe some folks who are caught up in the online slave auctions.

Great concept and well

Oxy Mora — Thu, 15 Dec 2011 14:28:10 +0000

In reply to Midnight's Last Gleaming, Chap. 12

Great concept and well written. As good as it is, I'm not sure I personally could keep my ADD mind wrapped around it for a full length novel. So I'll make a suggestion from my own reader's perspective--which is, to perhaps interleave these as flashbacks somehow against a straight overall narrative of a contemporary President in crisis who somehow has access to this as a kind of harbinger or muse. 50% of your work is done in the fine ending and other vignette---which I would put in the middle connected to the handling of the crisis. Really fascinating.

Brilliant!

Anonymous — Mon, 12 Dec 2011 13:24:48 +0000

In reply to Midnight's Last Gleaming, Chap. 12

Brilliant!

Weirdest thing I ever read.

Richard the Electrician — Mon, 12 Dec 2011 05:23:57 +0000

In reply to Midnight's Last Gleaming, Chap. 12

Weirdest thing I ever read.