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moat, these are wonderful.

MrSmith1 — Thu, 25 Jul 2013 03:53:24 +0000

In reply to My smile is legal. The land

moat, these are wonderful.

We could not hear the

cop walk up behind us while

we were making out.

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Sure, we tried again

but it is never the same.

Donuts dunk but once.

My smile is legal. The land

moat — Wed, 24 Jul 2013 23:01:52 +0000

In reply to A Too Darn Hot Friday Afternoon at the Haikulodeon

My smile is legal.

The land itself is on drugs;

Clouds stumble through trees.

Repeat after me.

But it is never the same.

Cat ignores the string.

We were making out.

The noon rush was closing in.

Napkin prints her lips.

Thanks trkingmomoe. I liked

MrSmith1 — Wed, 24 Jul 2013 10:48:25 +0000

In reply to Thanks, I enjoyed one about

Thanks trkingmomoe. I liked the pun of bred/bread in rye, and was trying to think of other towns, besides the infamous Intercourse, PA to use. I may revisit that haiku and either expand it or do a re-write on it sometime down the road. Of course, I find that Ho-Ho-Kus is always funny.

Thanks, I enjoyed one about

trkingmomoe — Mon, 22 Jul 2013 12:31:22 +0000

In reply to A Too Darn Hot Friday Afternoon at the Haikulodeon

Thanks, I enjoyed one about "raised in rye." Do you know how hard it is to get rye bread to rise? That is one heavy flour. Hopefully you have a break in the weather from the heat this week. You just keep getting better.