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HA! Good one! Why did the

MrSmith1 — Thu, 23 Jan 2014 13:22:41 +0000

In reply to It's not one syllable short

HA! Good one!

Why did the diphthong
cross the throat? It did not see
the glottal stop sign.

( I know, pretty weak response. Sorry 'bout that. It's all I got at the moment..)

It's not one syllable short

moat — Thu, 23 Jan 2014 12:45:52 +0000

In reply to Nice moat. ( though one

It's not one syllable short if you grew up in Texas and pronounce the last one like "eons."

What is this diphthong

doing in my haiku soup?

"The Butterfly, sir."

Nice moat. ( though one

MrSmith1 — Thu, 23 Jan 2014 03:00:10 +0000

In reply to Interruptions; One thought

Nice moat. ( though one syllable short in the first line.)

Hats worn at movies,

in days gone by, were targets

for stale ju-ju-bees.

Interruptions; One thought

moat — Thu, 23 Jan 2014 00:04:21 +0000

In reply to Nice. Tanka, moat. But

Interruptions;

One thought occludes another;

Hats worn at movies.

Clumsy clueless wherewithal,

The pick pocket getting paid.

Nice. Tanka, moat. But

MrSmith1 — Mon, 20 Jan 2014 03:33:53 +0000

In reply to On the Promenade Fog made

Nice. Tanka, moat.

But then, the cloud came.

Couples stopped dancing and old

men rose to their feet.

Children seemed bewildered, but

saw fear in their parents' eyes.

On the Promenade Fog made

moat — Mon, 20 Jan 2014 01:25:46 +0000

In reply to A Mid-January Friday Afternoon Thaw at the Haikulodeon

On the Promenade

Fog made Manhattan flicker.

But then the cloud came:

Its outline barely perceived

Before wrapping us in gloom.

Good one, Guy called LULU!

MrSmith1 — Sat, 18 Jan 2014 10:09:27 +0000

In reply to Tall trees say

Good one, Guy called LULU!

Willows will whisper

dogwoods have to bark, but the

tall trees say nothing.

Tall trees say

A Guy Called LULU — Sat, 18 Jan 2014 07:09:44 +0000

In reply to The 5-7-5-7-7 form is known

Tall trees say nothing
living only for sunrise
Green grass becomes brown

The 5-7-5-7-7 form is known

MrSmith1 — Sat, 18 Jan 2014 05:02:44 +0000

In reply to I like this. I am going to

The 5-7-5-7-7 form is known as tanka.

Yes, you know my heart,
for we are kindred spirits,
walking the same path.
But stay wary, dear friend, for
paths, like lover's hearts, may turn.

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The schwa is eaten,

yes eaten, by the diphthong,

All the live-long day ...

Enjoyed it as always.

trkingmomoe — Sat, 18 Jan 2014 04:18:35 +0000

In reply to A Mid-January Friday Afternoon Thaw at the Haikulodeon

Enjoyed it as always.