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Perfect! ;-)

barefooted — Wed, 30 Sep 2015 21:26:36 +0000

In reply to I have wrestled with this

Perfect! ;-)

LOL. Thank you, moat. I

MrSmith1 — Wed, 30 Sep 2015 20:53:33 +0000

In reply to I have wrestled with this

LOL. Thank you, moat. I love this one. LOL

I have wrestled with this

moat — Wed, 30 Sep 2015 20:18:20 +0000

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I have wrestled with this question a lot and Mr. Smith let me play me through with a mulligan by not calling me on my use of "fuel." In honor of my speech origins, I should have said "mesquite" instead.

I was in trouble.
When she removed her diphthong,
mah face cawt fie-yer.

Good one, Missy!!

MrSmith1 — Tue, 29 Sep 2015 11:28:22 +0000

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Good one, Missy!!

Conflagration is
the conflation of flame with
oxygen compounds.
Except. of course, hydrogen,.
which will rain on your parade.

Heat is compoundedby

barefooted — Tue, 29 Sep 2015 07:32:57 +0000

In reply to The fire is on fire

Heat is compounded

by the confusion of flame,

and it burns itself.

Seek a measure of moisture

chilled by the secure snowbank.

Yes, I saw that you did that.

MrSmith1 — Tue, 29 Sep 2015 07:20:46 +0000

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Yes, I saw that you did that. I think both fuel and fire are categorized as diphthongs, and therefore are one syllable words ... But here's my thought on the subject: if you're going to write with a Southern dialect, and make them two syllable words, then I think you need to make it apparent to a reader that might otherwise not be aware of your background. The easiest thing to do is spell the word in that fake phonetic way publishers used to use with lyrics to songs written in 'negro' dialect. ("Ole Man River, he jes' keep rollin' along.") Just as writers sometimes make words fit by using o'er for over, or ev-ry for every, I think you need to make it clear how many syllables the reader should use in pronouncing the word if you are expecting them to pronounce it differently than the way it is pronounced in Standard English.

How much does regional

barefooted — Tue, 29 Sep 2015 06:38:51 +0000

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How much does regional dialect play into haikus? Take the written words (in the above cases) "fire", or "fuel": is it one syllable or two? I consider that often when composing, because my Southern drawl doesn't often seem to fit the count. Because of that, I change words I feel best describe my point into ones that fit the structure. Honestly, that bothers me.

Nice, moat!!

MrSmith1 — Tue, 29 Sep 2015 04:29:47 +0000

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Nice, moat!!

tanka haiku:

When you decide to
give a flame a hot-foot, you're
fighting fire with fire.

but 'til the fuel runs out, you'll
not remember which ember.

The fire is on fire

moat — Tue, 29 Sep 2015 00:40:12 +0000

In reply to A Wholly Papal Friday Afternoon at the Haikulodeon.

The fire is on fire
until the fuel runs out
and it burns itself.

Bank the coals like a jail bird
evading the search party.

I like the bargello design

trkingmomoe — Fri, 25 Sep 2015 23:41:13 +0000

In reply to A Wholly Papal Friday Afternoon at the Haikulodeon.

I like the bargello design behind you in the picture. You were a handsome fellow.

Nat King Cole Autumn Leaves. Enjoy!