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    More haikus for another Friday afternoon

    By MrSmith1 on Fri, 08/19/2011 - 2:20pm |

    Here are some of my haikus from the past week:

     

    haiku: "Minds that only yearn,
    Never taste the fruit of life,
    Merely chew the rind."

    haiku: "Down on the bayou,
    nobody asks hominy grits,
    catfish eat pralines."

    haiku: "Living in the past,
    Though not a panacea,
    Is still comforting."

    haiku: "She sneezed her dress off,
    Which caused quite a kerfuffle,
    in the library."

    haiku: "Heaven only knows,
    What you were really thinking,
    When you said, 'Hello'."

    haiku: "She was unaware,
    That her presence caused a scene,
    So, moved blithely on..."

    haiku: "Shattering silence,
    The car horns' cacophony,
    Wakens my neighbors."

    haiku: "Willing accomplice,
    One to whom I owe so much,
    I'm glad you're my friend."

    haiku: "By the garden wall,
    a very blue hydrangea,
    contemplates escape."

    haiku: "Things you don't forget;
    My father built a wagon,
    for me to ride in."

    haiku: "60's cocktail hour,
    Whiskey sours were half-price,
    Tuesday's? Ladies Night."

    tanka haiku: "Are you touched each day?
    Do you caress your love, or
    hold them in your arms?
      Do you search for cyber-hugs,
      as salve for withered longings?"

    haiku: "Suddenly, footsteps,
    A shadow in the doorway,
    Then, a match is struck."

    haiku: "Cats and melon balls,
    a recipe for hijinks,
    and some sticky cats."

    haiku: "With flights of angels,
    No pat-downs or hold-overs,
    And no hi-jackings."

    haiku: "Abracadabra,
    makes rabbits disappear, (Psst!
    Under the table.)

    haiku: "The weekend hunter,
    tripped on a pine cone. Even
    his dog had to smile."

    haiku: "Waltzing through one's life,
    Not as easy as it sounds ...
    There's all that counting!"

    haiku: "'Honey, zip me up,
    Or we're going to be late',
    (Her hair was still wet.)"

    haiku: "He moves quietly,
    through dark streets and alleyways,
    Searching for lost souls."

    haiku: "In my loneliness,
    Watching as the world goes by,
    I re-think choices."

    haiku: Whist'ling in hallways,
    On a Saturday morning,
    Brings muffled retorts."

    haiku: "outside my window,
    I see (and hear) a street fair,
    so much for my nap."

    haiku: "his wishful thinking
    only confounded the Fates,
    so they surprised him."

    haiku: "Mary had a lamb,
    And little though it was, it ...
    began stalking her."

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    Comments

    Oops. Sorry. I meant to put this in the Creative Corner section.


    by MrSmith1 on Fri, 08/19/2011 - 2:21pm

    Nah, leave it here. Nothing much happening by way of traffic anyway.

    Good stuff!

    Kerfuffle in the library...now that is quite a line. hahahah


    by Richard Day on Fri, 08/19/2011 - 3:05pm

    She drank too much wine

    and forgot what she had said

    Now she drinks regret.


    by CVille Dem on Fri, 08/19/2011 - 3:32pm

    Swallowed too much wine,
    Her whine's too much to swallow,
    Now she swallows pride. 


    by MrSmith1 on Fri, 08/19/2011 - 4:49pm

    Good one!  How about this?

     

    She smiled at Pino,

    but Grigio made her cry.

    Her tears tasted good.

     


    by CVille Dem on Fri, 08/19/2011 - 6:05pm

    Nice, but the first line has six syllables.  


    by MrSmith1 on Fri, 08/19/2011 - 10:37pm

    No it doesn't: SHE / SMILED / AT / PI / NO

    by CVille Dem on Sat, 08/20/2011 - 1:03am

    I guess it's another variation on the whole smile diphthong argument.  I've always argued that smile is a one syllable word, but smiled ... yeah, okay.  I stand corrected. Sorry.


    by MrSmith1 on Sat, 08/20/2011 - 6:36am

    No worries

    by CVille Dem on Sat, 08/20/2011 - 7:12am

    I liked the Fate's surprise. For me it is like this:

     

    The most dreaded tasks,

    done without disaster.

    Glass explodes alone.


    by moat on Fri, 08/19/2011 - 7:58pm

    Good, but it's so tricky when a plural word where the s is verbalized is used as a one syllable word.  I try to avoid such dilemmas if I can.  I used to debate a friend as to whether or not smile is a one syllable word.  He insisted it was a two syllable word; 'Smi-uhl' ... I say one.

    I like the image of exploding glass - makes me imagine a chemistry experiment gone horribly wrong.

     


    by MrSmith1 on Fri, 08/19/2011 - 10:46pm

    The plural is wrong.

    Consonants crowd the hallway.

    Wet boots darken rug.

    ---------------------------

    Brevity lives twice;

    as a beautiful sentence

    and a tragic end.


    by moat on Sat, 08/20/2011 - 7:57pm

    Nicely done.


    by MrSmith1 on Sat, 08/20/2011 - 10:49pm

    I enjoyed reading them all. Excellent.

    Blue Hydrangea seems the most classic and enduring, true to the art form. #1

    I loved "Sneezed her dress off", very clever, I laughed, my keyboard along with me. #2

    Also liked zip me up.

    They're all very good.


    by Oxy Mora on Fri, 08/19/2011 - 9:49pm

    Thanks. I threw the hydrangea one in just to show that I can do the classics.  lol


    by MrSmith1 on Fri, 08/19/2011 - 10:47pm

    From last night:

    "Turn your blinkers off!,
    Move into the 'slow lane', PLEASE!
    Oh, for the love of ... !!
      Be kind when your grandma drives,
      You may be her age some day."


    by MrSmith1 on Sat, 08/20/2011 - 6:46am

    I've always appreciated haiku, though I don't seem to be wired to do it, myself.  The discipline frees the writer to come up with unique, clever word patterns that wouldn't have come naturally otherwise, and I suspect part of the fun of it is the writer's joy when it succeeds.

    I loved this one:

    haiku: "Minds that only yearn,
    Never taste the fruit of life,
    Merely chew the rind."

    Loved the wine haikus, too, and many others.  Just wanted to say thanks for some lovely reading.

     


    by Ramona on Sat, 08/20/2011 - 7:47am

    Tomatoes are good

    Bite into them and they burst

    With pure grooviness


    by CVille Dem on Sat, 08/20/2011 - 2:38pm

    Excellent ... although the folks at this website might disagree.


    by MrSmith1 on Sat, 08/20/2011 - 3:46pm

    Blasphemy! Actually, in Slovenijan and Croatian, the word for tomato is "paradise." I loves me some tomatoes!!!

    by CVille Dem on Sat, 08/20/2011 - 3:56pm

    The web is an interesting place...

    fun facts in Haiku:


    President Nixon

    covered his cottage cheese with

    Tomato Ketchup.


    by Elusive Trope on Sat, 08/20/2011 - 3:58pm

    all creations rise

    in the struggle against form.

    haiku no different.

     


    by Elusive Trope on Sat, 08/20/2011 - 3:47pm

    I have to not that the last line works if one uses the verbal "dif frent" as opposed to the proper "dif fer ent"


    by Elusive Trope on Sat, 08/20/2011 - 3:51pm

    Sweet ... and yes, in similar situations I often use diff'rent to comply with the form, so I'll assume you were using the two syllable pronunciation and not making a statement about rebelling against the 17 syllable form (even though I suspect you were. LOL)


    by MrSmith1 on Sat, 08/20/2011 - 6:30pm

    OK, OK, my last submission:

    She had been his muse

    But, being smarter than he,

    It all went downhill


    by CVille Dem on Sat, 08/20/2011 - 4:49pm

    one more shot across

    the bow in the gender war.

    will it never end?


    by Elusive Trope on Sat, 08/20/2011 - 5:35pm

    On the other hand,

    "He had been her muse,

    But, she's smarter than he, so ...  

    It was all uphill."

     

     


    by MrSmith1 on Sat, 08/20/2011 - 6:33pm

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